Saturday, February 6, 2010

What if...

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30 Seconds since the truck hit Rajiv’s bike and sped away. 
The driver of the truck was too drunk to even realize what he just did to 26 year old Rajiv. 
Rajiv laid there in the chilling cold, with his head on the divider of NH9. He tried hard to push the bike that was crushing his already broken left leg, with his right hand. The pain he felt in his back and the left limbs was far more excruciating than he could endure. He wished either for the pain or his life to end at that very moment. But the warm blood that was oozing from his forehead flowing down his left cheek and neck reminded him of Aarthi’s cold fingers and her warm embrace.

It has been exactly a year since he last saw Aarthi on 06/06/07, the day he noted down as the most painful day in his life in the dairy which he started writing since that day.
It was 10 minutes past 5.00pm when he saw Aarthi sitting at the corner table of their favorite restaurant. As always Aarthi reached before him. How much ever Rajiv tried he always got late and She was always before time. 

As Rajiv lay on the hard concrete road, staring into the dawn sky at the fading stars, he remembered the gleaming eyes of Aarthi. Her eyes always got brighter when he was with her. He had no doubts on the fact that she was madly in love with him. So was he, but he never could dare to tell her his feelings. Not that he was afraid of rejection. He knew that Aarthi was longing to hear what she already told him. But he did not want to commit himself in a lifelong relationship when he himself was depending on his parents for all his financial needs. Just a few more days and I will propose her he kept telling himself since the day Aarthi proposed him a year ago on 06/06/06.
Aarthi was excited to see Rajiv. She was about to tell Rajiv that it was exactly a year since she proposed him and exactly 2 years since they first met when Rajiv said, “I need time to settle first, Career is important everything else can wait. Forget me please.” It came as a shock to Aarthi that Rajiv still could not respect her feelings. After a long conversation which eventually ended in a heated argument, both left their favorite restaurant and parted their ways.





Rajiv could not see the tears in Aarthi’s eyes that she held back while she said a ‘Good Bye’ with a smile on her face. If Rajiv turned back and looked at Aarthi he would have seen her looking at him with longing eyes with tears rolling down her cheeks. But that evening he did not look back, even though he longed to hug Aarthi and assure her that it will not be long before they would be back together again.
Aarthi kept calling Rajiv for the months that followed. But Rajiv bluntly refused her every call. And each time he avoided her call it broke his heart. But he really wanted time for himself and for Aarthi to choose the paths best for them. As days passed the frequency with which Aarthi called Rajiv reduced. And 6 months after their break up, Aarthi never called Rajiv again. Rajiv very much missed Aarthi and he many a times thought of getting back to her. But his determination to succeed in his life held him back from going back to her.
On 07/06/08, at 5.10 p.m Rajiv received a call on his phone. It was the HR of the company of his dreams who told him the good news he was yearning to hear for so long. He finally got his dream job. The first person he wanted to share the news was Aarthi and he immediately dialed her number. After an hour and still not being able to reach her or any of their common friends, Rajiv decided to go to Aarthi’s place. Not finding any means of transport he took his bike and started for her place at 11.00pm on the NH9 the very road on which they both together used to go for long drives.  
Rajiv was about to reach Aarthi’s place in about 30 minutes when he met with an accident. Even after 30 minutes after the fatal accident, Rajiv laid there with blood still oozing from his head. Rajiv did not know if he was hallucinating or if Aarthi was really beside him with tears in her eyes as she wiped the blood off his face with her cold fingers.  Rajiv said “I am sorry Aarthi” as he closed his eyes to never open again.
It was at 5.45 A.m in the morning when Dr.Parvesh, driving a Car on the NH9 noticed a man lying in a pool of blood. Dr.Parvesh realized it was too late and that the young man died of excess bleeding. When Dr.Parvesh looked at the face of the dead young man, he was reminded of his daughter who committed suicide 6 months ago. When he saw the Diary of Rajiv beside his bike and a picture of Aarthi and Rajiv in it, he looked at the sky and burst out crying looking at the only star that was still blinking. He now understood why his sensitive dear daughter left him.
                                       *****
#What if Rajiv turned back and looked at Aarthi for one last time on 06/06/07, maybe Rajiv would have reconsidered his decision.
#What if Rajiv would have accepted Aarthi's call at least once, maybe Rajiv would have reconsidered his decision.
#What if Rajiv had known that Aarthi died 6 months ago, maybe he would have killed himself too.
#What if the truck driver was not drunk, the accident might not have happened at all.
#What if Dr.Parvesh did not travel NH9 to attend an emergency case he might not have never known the reason behind his daughter’s death.
                                            *****
P.S.
# Thank you Mommy!!! For the idea and all the encouragement and for all the CRITICISM!!

# Thankyou  Tavish! Somehow your post on 30 seconds late inspired me to write up this story!

# Planning to write a story for BAT, 2 or 3 hours before the deadline and trying to post it on time. Truly exciting!! :~)





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28 comments:

Mahesh Aadhya Kalal said...

Splendid...
simple, yet touching..
Queer narration...
will composed story....
keep up the gud work :)

Naina Sethi said...

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Being Mindful said...

asusual extraordinary

Tavish Chadha(sensible-bakwas.com) said...

wow! that was really touching...
u published it exactly at 12 mid night! lol

P.S. the link u posted is a little incorrect... u added a T after the address... ppl would realize that but i suggest send in a mail to Vipul and repost it...

Cheers!
Tavish
Last Blog Post: What If...

VeeKay said...

Chaala ghaatu love story..The intensity of emotions you portrayed on the post is amazing..If you direct a movie wid this theme, it might not be a commercial hit but it will get the applaud of critics and draw crowds..:P :)

Sureindran said...

finally, a good love story! Congrats and keep writing. Good luck for the batom.

Anonymous said...

Interesting narration....I liked the twists in the narration. Nice story...Good luck! :)

Mural! said...

nice story again! love and death...........

interesting choice of 06/06/06, considering that 666 is believed to be the number of the satan atleast in pop-culture :D

nice, so you even enlisted help from your mom!

Pushpz said...

very well told and the flow of the story is very smooth..enjoyed reading it :))

MADHU RAO | (INDImag.COM) said...

Agree with Pushpee, a nice story well told. Loved the flow.

Good Luck !

Karthik said...

A very different story and you've done a commendable job, Archana. There wasn't a single dull moment. Thanks to your narration. Too good, yar. Just too good. :)
All the best for batom! :)

Pramathesh said...

I have deliberately tried not to leave traces of my visit in each blog participating in BAT 7. But you are too good.

Ashish Gourav said...

what a sad example of communication gap :(

Rajeev should've tried to convince aarti about his career plans...and I guess she might have understood

IIM ka Sarkari Babu said...

Touching... Felt almost real... What if...

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Suree said...

archana..
that was so good.. excellent narration and wonderful story... i think u should try writing novels.. :)

Unknown said...

Another very well narrated Love Story...liked the detailing...good job Archana...

Anonymous said...

Nice story! I wish she hadn't killed herself though... :( maybe they would have ended up together.
I agree with Ashish, he should have talked to her about his plans...

Megha said...

Nice story, simple but good narration.

What I don't understand is how guys just kill themselves b'coz they couldnt get things they wanted. That's life and once should understand, perhaps their friends & family who's seeing people entering depression should give them courage and hope.

Keep writing & all the best :)

Oxymoron said...

so you are completely into tragedies arent you....this ones is wonderfully narrated....but why did both of them had to died....i think Rajiv was lucky to have died.....a much greater sufferin awaited him...

Anonymous said...

Interesting..very interesting...

buckingfastard said...

what if we cud start new,
i had my job and money too.
what if i had seen you cry,
stayed wid u till the tears dry.
what if you asked once more,
and i cud say "i love you too!!".

Anonymous said...

Hai buckingfastard,
Loved your comment more than the story!
Thankyou So Much!

Anonymous said...

Hello dilontherocks,
Thankyou!

HaiOxymorom
;~) Yeah!Both of them had to die because I wanted the readers to suffer :~P
Well..it is some sort of happy ending to a unhappy story-both of them being together atleast after the death. :)

Hey Megha
Thankyou!
you are right....Death is never the answer.
:~)

Hello Blabberblah
Thankyou! It was a story..just a story....somehow close to my heart :)

HaiDhiman,
Thankyou Dhiman!!

HelloSuree
Thakyou so much!! Thats such a big compliment!
:~)

HaiSarkari Babu,
Thankyou!!!!!!

Hai Ashish,
Yeah!!You are right! Communication gap is one thing I wanted to show in this post apart from ow sensitive a girl and her needs can be.
:~)Thanks for the comment!

HaiPramathesh
Thankyou So so so much!!
A special thanks for voting my story!!
Never ever expected a vote and it sure did make me HAPPY!! :~)

HaiKarthik,
Thankyou!!!I am really glad you liked it!

Anonymous said...

HelloMadhu
Thankyou so much!!!

HelloPushpee
Thankyou so much!!

HelloMurali
Iam glad you noticed it! :~)
Thankyou so much for the lovely comment!

HaiPsych Babbler
Thankyou so much!!

HelloSureindran
Thankyou soooo much!!

Anonymous said...

HaiVamsi
Thankyou :)
challa happy to have your comment ekkada!!

HaiTavish
Thankyou!!
I write at the eleventh hour so no wonder I happened to post the link at 0 hrs.
Inb/w thanks for the advie..I did tell Vipul following your advice!
Thankyou so much!!

HaiAkka
Thanks!! :~*

HelloNaina
Thanks!
You have a tremedeous blog!
Keep blogging!!

Hai Mahesh
Thankyou so much!
Thats sweet and kind of you !!

Sorcerer said...

Here after a short break from the blogosphere and..wow!!!!!
your writing is getting so better and this is fantafabulous

THis is a masterpiece..
loved every bit of it

Sriram Agrawal said...

"Simply Awesome"

D flow d turns d emotions and most of all the irony and coincidences u brought in was just too good !!!